So this is the final draft for now, I am going to leave it alone after this so I can focus on the show bible.
However this was big changes. The script has been cut down, trimmed loads of fat off of it and lost about 5-6 pages. Removing a lot of empty dialogue and exposition so I can try that whole show don’t tell thing people are always going on about. Though I am a little concerned now that cutting it down so much means that we are not going to have long enough for an episode for the series…..
Bridges to cross another time I suppose. Will is doing an animatic for the Short as well so i can visually see the result and I think that will help me refine the script once he is done with that.
I did add a scene however, well more extended the scene with the two main girls talking, my girlfriend asked if I did it for the Bechdel test and I want to go on record to say something. Firstly no I did not do it for that test I just figured it would help make the characters feel more natural and Matt was the one saying that scene could be expanded upon.
MORE IMPORTANTLY I dislike the Bechdel test, I believe it is a bunch of crap. It is not an accurate measure of female representation in media. It honestly has as much standing as Asimov’s laws of robotics (THAT IS TO SAY ZERO STANDING)
Both of those are not scientific, zero research was done to come to either of these tests or laws. They were both created by a writer and society takes them way to easily as doctrine.
Apologies I just wanted to vent and that is what this blog is for….. so why am I apologising…. I dunno … god I’m losing it.
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